Friday, July 04, 2008

Persistence of Vision















Its been a while,
Since the mist of
Last night's suffering
Has been of any significance.
The air is moist and cool-
Not cold
-And the light is dim
And faint, with
Its origin unfathomable.

Not wrapped in the finest wool
This world can produce,
But in common cotton,
The surrounding coolness
Seems threatening.
There is a road, though,
Leading to many lands,
Some reached, some unreached,
And some thought to be unreachable.
To embark on a journey
To an unknown destination,
Is always thought to be foolish.

The dangers are feared,
The rewards are overlooked,
Thus the strength to set out,
Subdued.
Only those
Of unhindered determination
And, a mad love
For all things feared,
Yet revered,
Appreciate the beauty-
As comparative as it might be
-In breaking selfish bonds,
Yet maintaining
Their responsibilities.

"Let us look down
Upon composure and self-control."
Others explain.
"Let us look down
Upon your narrow-mindedness."
They reply.
Do not ask them
The meaning of loneliness,
For they laugh at it,
Though they live in it.
They live shunned.
By groups of small-thinking
Pessimists,
Who strangely
Are allowed to influence,
Other vulnerable minds.

Individual intelligence,
Has taken a back seat
(Has been given one, rather).
Only now will the arguement,
Shift in favour of the likes of
Galileo, Newton, DaVinci,
Among others,
But only a few
Will get up
With firm resolve,
To follow their example.
And thus will win,
The persistence
Of their inner vision.
-Me

9 comments:

Anonymous said...

i'm also into those things. care to give some advice?

Anonymous said...

that's really cute..wish i had one too.

Anonymous said...

To the owner of this blog, how far youve come?You were a great blogger.

still life said...

Marty as a whole the poem speaks volumes but parts of it need editing, the beginning sketches a grim background, but its not too clear “Has been of any significance.” Significantly distracted my mind.
The next few lines remind me very much of a song in Lord of the Rings : The Road goes on and on – Bilbo Baggins
The next couple of lines lack the flow, it some how did not appeal to me, kind of stumbling and tumbling its way down

"Let us look down
Upon composure and self-control."
Others explain.
"Let us look down
Upon your narrow-mindedness."
They reply.
Please explain I feel it is unneeded.

Do not ask them
The meaning of loneliness,
For they laugh at it,
Though they live in it.
They live shunned.
By groups of small-thinking
Pessimists,
Who strangely
Are allowed to influence,
Other vulnerable minds

This part came off really well was like a hidden punch to the subconscious mind.


In the next lines I fail to understand y a reference to Dan brown cropped up between thinkers like Newton and Galileo, correct me if I be wrong.


Pls edit.

Anonymous said...

marty y no new post

...Mystified... said...

Not easy to explain my state of mind while writing. Frustration is one that I can put a finger on. Didn't really care about what I was saying to the entire world as long as I was getting what was inside, out.
Posts are going to take some time puppy...will let you know when I write more.

Ananya said...

frustration is it? it is so avid throughout.. the poem casts a sense of vague enchantment,dont know why

Aashi said...

hmm i dont knw how to pen any diffrent than wat "still life" has already mentioned and maybe moreso.. but yes.....ur choice of words could have been better..or shall i say...you basically strayed in ur idea in this poem...

but u knw wat..thts wat an idyll is.....you start at one end...you finish at the same point..but in between...you wander off where ur mind fancies...

u did just tht marty...and well u said u just spat out wat was in ur heart.......all i have to say is that it shows...

its vague...but after a few readings....one grows to it... :)

Anwesh said...

Hmm, again a good thought in the poem...

This time the execution isn't that good... the lines are a bit confusing and the sentence structure has been kinda vague..

The poem was a good read.. but there is some finesse that is still left to be added..

Anyways, good writing..

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